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Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 16:01:29 GMT -5
TITLE: Falling Rain.
TYPE: Free Verse.
CRITIQUE: Yes.
OTHER: I really like this. Just wrote it after school, sitting on my back porch.
aggravating some
rain can soothe
restless minds
or angered spirits
senses aroused
sounds intrigue
hear
a bird
a splash
a gust of wind
nature harmonizes
feel
a raindrop
surprising
delightful
smell and taste
freshness
breathe clean
new air
overpowering aroma
watch
grass
s e c o n d
by
s e c o n d
m i n u t e
by
m i n u t e
becoming greener
growing taller
see the birds
return
delighted in the calming showers
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Post by Kaiya on Apr 22, 2009 21:11:51 GMT -5
i LOVE this. very much. a few spelling errors, but the content is fantastic. the rains we've had here the past few days have been the mist kind (not real rain), which is sad. haha. anyway, greeaaattttt job!
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Post by christine , on Apr 22, 2009 21:14:22 GMT -5
Thanks. That's what I was writing about. The misty sorta stuff.
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Post by Kaiya on Apr 22, 2009 21:18:39 GMT -5
which is great to look at, but if i'm stuck in it, i wanna be IN it. am i making any sense here? XDXDXD
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Post by christine , on Apr 22, 2009 21:35:24 GMT -5
Totally! I came home the other day and got sooo soaked. EDIT: I spell checked.  |
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Post by Kaiya on Apr 23, 2009 9:50:31 GMT -5
bahaha. me too! but it only rained one day, the rest have all been the awkward mist stuff that only looks pretty. when you're dry. XD i like rain on me. not mist. it makes me feel like the world is closing in. LOL
YAYYY! looks purrfect now!
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Post by christine , on Apr 23, 2009 14:27:16 GMT -5
Haha.
Thanks.
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