[K] Falling

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[K] Falling Apr 16, 2009 14:51:04 GMT -5

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Post by Kaiya on Apr 16, 2009 14:51:04 GMT -5

TITLE: Falling
TYPE: Free Verse
CRITIQUE: Yes
OTHER: Featured on RedBubble groups twice.

I guess it’s safe to say
that I’m
losing
my
grip.

My palms are getting slick,
my fingers slipping.

It’s taking so long for
my feet
to
touch
ground.

I’m falling so slowly,
I cannot breathe.

My clothes are fluttering
‘round my
long
lost
form.

I’ve not a rush of air
nor flut’ring wings.

When will this timeless fall
come to
its
last
stop?

credit to heimweh26

my author's file.
layout updated: may fifteenth

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christine , T E A C H E R R O O M 0 3 3[M:220] !c!E33638 Posts: 92	[K] Falling Apr 21, 2009 16:04:37 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 16:04:37 GMT -5 This an amazing piece. I have a generally hard time critiquing(?) things, but this is just wonderful. You used creative words and the arrangement is nice. Love it! You're extremely talented, darling.
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Kaiya B O S S L A D Y G.I.G. FOUNDER E.L.I.T.E. FOUNDER[M:0] aesthetically-minded!c!FF3D0D Posts: 180	[K] Falling Apr 21, 2009 16:13:54 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Kaiya on Apr 21, 2009 16:13:54 GMT -5 Thank youuuu! [: I based this off of a journal entry I found from ages ago. I took out words and phrases, only changed a few things. Hehe. They're called "found poems", I think. I loooveee them.
	credit to heimweh26 my author's file. layout updated: may fifteenth [My5:http://myspace.com/kaiyarae]

christine , T E A C H E R R O O M 0 3 3[M:220] !c!E33638 Posts: 92	[K] Falling Apr 21, 2009 16:34:42 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 16:34:42 GMT -5 Oh, I guess I've done a found poem, too, then. It's really nice. I think I need to find a thesaurus. I'm running out of words to compliment you with.
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Kaiya B O S S L A D Y G.I.G. FOUNDER E.L.I.T.E. FOUNDER[M:0] aesthetically-minded!c!FF3D0D Posts: 180	[K] Falling Apr 21, 2009 17:24:53 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Kaiya on Apr 21, 2009 17:24:53 GMT -5 giggles I LOVE thesauruses. Thesauri? No, that's not right... Hm.
	credit to heimweh26 my author's file. layout updated: may fifteenth [My5:http://myspace.com/kaiyarae]

christine , T E A C H E R R O O M 0 3 3[M:220] !c!E33638 Posts: 92	[K] Falling Apr 21, 2009 17:34:38 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 17:34:38 GMT -5 I love them, too! That's interesting....how do you say that?
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Kaiya B O S S L A D Y G.I.G. FOUNDER E.L.I.T.E. FOUNDER[M:0] aesthetically-minded!c!FF3D0D Posts: 180	[K] Falling Apr 21, 2009 18:48:21 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Kaiya on Apr 21, 2009 18:48:21 GMT -5 I'M SO AMAZING! I just Google'd it. They're BOTH correct! ;D
	credit to heimweh26 my author's file. layout updated: may fifteenth [My5:http://myspace.com/kaiyarae]

christine , T E A C H E R R O O M 0 3 3[M:220] !c!E33638 Posts: 92	[K] Falling Apr 22, 2009 16:38:04 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by christine , on Apr 22, 2009 16:38:04 GMT -5 Seriously! That's so cool! Lolz.
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Kaiya B O S S L A D Y G.I.G. FOUNDER E.L.I.T.E. FOUNDER[M:0] aesthetically-minded!c!FF3D0D Posts: 180	[K] Falling Apr 22, 2009 17:23:22 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Kaiya on Apr 22, 2009 17:23:22 GMT -5 I thought so, too. XD
	credit to heimweh26 my author's file. layout updated: may fifteenth [My5:http://myspace.com/kaiyarae]

Post by Kaiya on Apr 16, 2009 14:51:04 GMT -5

Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 16:04:37 GMT -5

Post by Kaiya on Apr 21, 2009 16:13:54 GMT -5

Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 16:34:42 GMT -5

Post by Kaiya on Apr 21, 2009 17:24:53 GMT -5

Post by christine , on Apr 21, 2009 17:34:38 GMT -5

Post by Kaiya on Apr 21, 2009 18:48:21 GMT -5

Post by christine , on Apr 22, 2009 16:38:04 GMT -5

Post by Kaiya on Apr 22, 2009 17:23:22 GMT -5