Post by Kaiya on Apr 16, 2009 12:35:42 GMT -5
TITLE: Tell Me
TYPE: Free Verse
CRITIQUE: Yes
OTHER: Featured on two RedBubble groups, Feb. 2009.
when a person
so real to you
stops
existing
tell me how to f e e l
when the memory
becomes the oxygen
impossibly
solidified
tell me how to b r e a t h e
when a person
whom you cherish
disappears
forever
tell me how to s e e
when a friend
whom you trust
transforms
completely
tell me how to b e l i e v e
but when your lover
who was never tangible
never
speaks
tell me you u n d e r s t a n d
and when you weren’t ready
for that moment
of
silence
try to tell me that i’m w r o n g
TYPE: Free Verse
CRITIQUE: Yes
OTHER: Featured on two RedBubble groups, Feb. 2009.
when a person
so real to you
stops
existing
tell me how to f e e l
when the memory
becomes the oxygen
impossibly
solidified
tell me how to b r e a t h e
when a person
whom you cherish
disappears
forever
tell me how to s e e
when a friend
whom you trust
transforms
completely
tell me how to b e l i e v e
but when your lover
who was never tangible
never
speaks
tell me you u n d e r s t a n d
and when you weren’t ready
for that moment
of
silence
try to tell me that i’m w r o n g
The layout of course fits perfectly, but I've always known you to be aesthetically-minded, so I would expect nothing less 
